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She collapsed onto the bed beside him, her head resting in the hollow below his shoulder. Her legs bent, lifted from the bed as she sighed. His arm wrapped around her, holding her safely against him. She smiled, looking up at him as he spoke, his hold tightening occasionally as they lay together. She'd always loved when they could do this. Lay on his bed together and forget the world while they shared their problems.


They understood each other; their words, their actions. It all made sense in a way neither could comprehend and neither would give up. She rolled, curling into his body as they continued to talk, relaying their days, as was usual for the two. Not able to help herself, she smiled and kissed his cheek gently before nuzzling into his neck.


He chuckled but leaned into the touch, resting his lips against her hair as she stayed curled into his body. They continued to lay in silence after they'd finished purging their emotions, content to lay in silence, the last words they'd spoken still hanging in the air around them. Slowly they drifted, holding each other even in sleep, basking in the safety and comfort of the embrace, proving the words they used to end each day.


“I love you”
Just crap that I write when I feel like it. Besties having a feelings jam. The usual. It's short as hell.
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ValerieCFrechmann Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know if you meant to do it, but there's a 'writer's rule' where you have to use minimal of the 'were, had, was' and replace them with visual words.
And you did a great job of following that. (I can't, for the love of me, grasp that concept)

This was very beautifully written. I'm almost jealous of your descriptive language. :P

Amazing work
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mistressdeathstrike Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I appreciate it. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. 
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sherlockholmes34 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
I really like this you write very well. You write very beautifully.  
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mistressdeathstrike Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. But this was mostly written because I needed to get my mind off some things. I appreciate the feedback
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sherlockholmes34 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013
Your welcome. 
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Mattchewbackaar Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A beautiful piece =) I love the picture along with it.
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mistressdeathstrike Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it

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WilliamOutbreak Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Really good! I know I've written short pieces similar to this in the past myself, but those are when I'm at my peak of loneliness :P
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mistressdeathstrike Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. This was requested by my best friend to take my mind off the panic attack I was suffering at the time. Mostly it's just drivel. Heh. But this one just seemed too sweet to keep to myself. I'm glad you liked it. And I'm sorry about the loneliness. Ever need to chat or anything, hit me up. 
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